Dieting can change a person�s life for the better or ruins one�s health completely. What�s your opinion?
Dieting seems to be part of our life in this modern society, especially for those who are health conscious. Different people choose different type of dieting methods, trying to achieve what they believe to be good for either their health or physical appearance. In general, most of the people who diet are focusing on controlling their weight.
In our urban society, most of the working class person does not have the opportunity to consume a healthy meal. Their daily meals consist of fast food which contains high amount of fat and salt. The most significant prove of this unhealthy lifestyle is weight gain especially among those middle age working professionals.
Therefore, most of these young and energetic people have to control their diet in order to stay in shape either for their appearance or health. The most common and proper method of maintaining ones weight is eating less oily food, preferably more green vegetables, fruits and avoid alcohol.
However, some have restore to loosing weight by restricting their diet to the very minimal or to some extreme, not eating at all for days. Others will make themselves vomit after each meal. Many others will go for dieting medication and beverages that cause them to loose their appetite. These unhealthy dieting will cause internal damage in the long run.
In my opinion, dieting for better health is more important than solely for looking attractive. Individual who wish to control their weight should seek professional adviseif they are unable to reduce their weight after switching over to a healthy diet for a period of time. Loosing weight and loosing your health together does not benefit any individual.
This essay needs some work. The first body paragraph explains the reason people have for dieting, whereas it should explain what are the advantages or the dangers of it. The second body paragraph explains how to diet, whereas it should present arguments for or against dieting. Therefore, the task is only partially covered here.
On the bright side, the sentences are well-structured and the vocabulary is sufficient, the usage of linking words is smooth and the spelling and grammar are mostly fine (see comments underlined in blue). Overall, looks like a Band 6 essay.
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