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IELTS Essay, topic: Financial education at school

Financial education should be a mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

 

Children in this modern era have all the magnificent toys, food and lots of other interesting stuff in the market then in the past. They are bound to have a craving onall this stuff they see. In other words children will be spending on anything they want or find it interesting to them. Even some adults these days have some kind of craving to the thing they find it amazing. 

If financial education starts at the very beginning of the school years, this will help them to understand the value of money. Children should also be taught to manage their expenses and ways to spend wisely. When a child is being taught this in the school program, the child will be able to apply it when they are out to purchase or when have left the school years. They will not be cheated when they are young and will not only benefit their families but also the country that they live when they are older.

 

However, there are some children that are capable to handle the their financial in a very positive way even before they learned it from school. This children would have learnt from their families or people around them. They are more well manage, compare the other children from families background that a richer where spending are not a problem to them.

 

My conclusion is, children regardless of their background should be taught financial education from school at the very beginning then only parents guide them from home as well.__

 

This essay needs work. In the first paragraph you should have introduced the problem and mentioned what the two opinions are. Some of your sentences are unclear and their structure needs improvement (see comments underlined in blue for details). Also, there are arguments for financial education and no arguments against, which means that the task is only partially covered. Overall, looks like a Band 6 – 6.5 essay.

 

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