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IELTS Essay, topic: Critical factor to development of a country

 

Some people say education is the only critical factor to development of a country. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

 

One the one hand good education is a highly recommended skill in the developed countries, on the other hand the highest wish of many people in regions of poverty. But what makes education to the key factor for the development of a country?

We must acknowledge that education is something that we all need. The differences are just what we learn. Mostly the educational horizon of poor and less educated people has more to deal with their personal situation than with problems of bigger effects on a country. Attending school is sometimes too expensive and it does not feed a family.

 

Nevertheless there must be a reason for education. For me it looks like some countries have realized that Education is the key for the globalization process. If we take India for example we can see that a change in the educational system had changed the economy of the country. The country has changed from a poor region to a high potential aria for IT knowledge.

 

In regard to this fact it is a must that the Governments of less developed countries take the power of education serious and offer it to a wide range of people. Spending money for education is the key tippy title=”for”]to[/tippy] a new future effects on the economy and the social life. All in all I agree with the importance of education for the development of a country. Less knowledge leads to poverty and not to knowledge that has wide effects. Learning and Knowledge is Power and an investment in the near future and therefore it has to be an official task.

 

This essay covers the task. It has a good structure, however the conclusion paragraphs is too big � consider splitting it into 2 paragraphs. As to structure of sentences, there are several sentences that should be rephrased (see comments for suggestions). Grammar also needs some attention (see underlined in blue comments for details). Overall, looks like a band 6.5 essay.

 

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